Welcome to another Six Sentence Sunday. I've decided it's
time to take a break from the Mexican Stand-off and do some Sci-Fi. This one is
from The Colonists Wife which I've been polishing. It's a Witness
Protection-Arranged Marriage-at an Off-Planet Mine in the year 2088. Fair enough
to say our girl, Louise, is in for one hell of an adventure…
Wives went last.
The ship shuddered and groaned again beneath
her feet like some big metal beast shaking itself off. Louise stood to the side
of the cargo bay doors and let all the important company people disembark first
down the gang-way. People strode alongside the small transports that rolled out,
raising plumes of grey dust when they hit the surface. The whole thing was
handled with military like precision until finally only she was left, standing there forgotten.
It was time to meet her husband.
Great six sentences! =)) but then you know I love your writing
ReplyDeleteWonderful six! Loved the description, the scene setting and the emotional tension of meeting her husband at the end of the snippet. Loved it! :)
ReplyDeleteOh, love the premise behind this. And the tension you built into this six. Can't wait to see more of this!
ReplyDeleteGawd, what a terrific first paragraph -- perfect in its simplicity, yet so telling. And I agree with the other comments, great tension.
ReplyDeleteAnd now I'm left wondering about the husband! Great tensions there.
ReplyDeleteLOVE this, wow. Can't wait to read more. what an excellent setup for the story! Great six!
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